Two weeks of vacation, one week of catch up at work (and on the web, of course, but that’s a whole ‘nother matter…) and I finally cracked open Marks of Repentance again today. Oh, you should hear the gears in my brain creak as I try to turn the crank.
And why is the very next scene a mis-managed transition? In which the pov character isn’t clear until half way through? Can you say, “too much TELLING, not enough showing”?
Methinks it will be work to fix. But what do I know? The customers come flocking in to distract me. AARGH.